Pacing

Ugh, not going to be a good day. We had thunderstorms ALL NIGHT. Didn't sleep much, and when I did, I had dreams about being late for work because the electricity went out. Which it didn't, but a girl can worry.


I've been hearing a lot of complaints about the serial series, that they're moving too slow. They're not giving us enough information and they're not giving it to us fast enough. I think that's one of the reasons I was having trouble with Prison Break. In the first season, it was breath-takingly fast, one problem on top of another. In the beginning with Lost, we were patient because we trusted the writers to give us something at some point. Plus, there were a lot of characters to get to know. (An interesting observation from my son - he doesn't watch the first disc of the other two seasons. Too much set up.) I'm not sure about The Nine - would we be happier if we knew everything that went on in the bank up front? Do we not trust the writers yet? They're giving us info every week.

The reason I'm thinking about this is that I'm having the same problem in Spy Girl (which, so we're clear, is the working title). I hadn't wanted to show Corbett as the bad guy yet. I wanted the reader to be charmed, and then think, "Oh, my God, this is the bad guy!" But I don't know if I don't trust myself or if I don't trust my reader (which will be Trish, so I should trust her, but you know....) because I went ahead and pointed. "Look here! This is the bad guy!"

I'd also wanted to keep the hero under wraps for a bit longer. After all, he works for the bad guy (undercover, but still.) Yet he and my heroine have already had the conversation about what they need to do to nail this guy.

I guess I'm kind of getting the feeling the reader would prefer the information up front. But how do you decide?

I'm keeping up with my goals on Nano, but didn't wake up early enough to write this morning :( Hope I'm not too tired when I get home!

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5 comments:

Stephanie Bose said...

Way to go on keeping the pace with NaNo... as for the other pacing, well, I'm a bad person to ask : )

mary beth said...

Which adds tension? If by knowing the reader is on the edge of their seat waiting for the moment the hero and heroine figure it out, tell the reader. If telling the reader makes the tension fizzle out, DON'T tell the reader.
Good job on nano. I suck this year, but hopefully that will change now that a deadline is in.

Shesawriter said...

I could only give The Nine, TEN minutes. After that, I was in danger of falling asleep. Complete Dullsville.

Olga said...

Hugs on thunderstorms. I remember I was afraid to oversleep, and then I couldn't fall asleep because I kept thinking: how am I going to shower and put make up on in darkness? As for doubts, I normally ask my pc's, then compare their opinion with mine, and work from there. I'm sure your story will work out wonderfully!

MaryF said...

Mary Beth, maybe if I'd done more planning, I would know which added more tension ;) I think probably the reader knowing and watching my heroine fall for him would be more tension-filled.

Glad your deadline's in. Stupid network.

Tanya, yeah, that's what I thought, too, but I was thinking it could have been that I was fired up for Nano.

Olga, I'm so not ready to show this book to anyone. Lately I have to hold a book close till I really know what I'm doing with it (and does that ever happen for anyone??)

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