Having a Bit of a Freak Out, Actually

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(The quote is from Disney's Aladdin, in case you're racking your brain as I was.)

My revisions have me in a tizzy. For the most part, my edits have been easy, repeated words, tiny story questions. But when I was doing yesterday's pages (before school, and before picking up the ds from school AGAIN), her notes were more about the story. And there's one I just don't know how to fix. I'd never realized it. My agent never realized it. The two Silhouette editors who read it never said anything about it.

My timeline is off. I have part of Gabe's conflict as people trying to mold him to be who they think he is, and part of that was his ex-eife pushing him to be a smokejumper. Only he met and married her when he was in his 30s, and I doubt he'd go to smokejumping school at that age. So I'm trying to wrap my mind around it, and trying to think how I'm going to expand the ending (she says it's too rushed.) I was going to send it to my chapter's online critique last night but fell asleep on the couch!

So thinking about revisions is making me queasy.

I did dream I got my cover, and they had this old guy on the cover. Ew.

No tests today, but we're going to review like crazy.

Grey's Anatomy was new last night and GOOOOOOOOD. I cried so much!

Oh, and my FAVORITE JDM website is GONE!! WAH!!!



Kelly Boyce said...

Good luck with the revisions!

Anonymous said...

HUGS Mary!!!!! Kudos to your editor for catching it because you KNOW your readers would have.

KATZ said...

Hang in there -- I bet the answer will come when you least expect it! Try going for a long car drive... :)

BTW, I'm itching to see PS ILoveYou (read: the hot Irish men) again, before it's out of theatres... I couldn't drool properly with my sister there. ;)

Linda Winfree said...

Mary, you can do it! If it makes you feel any better, I'm right there with you -- our editor is GREAT at finding things we miss. I'm editing,too. If you need to commiserate, drop me an email . . .

Natalie J. Damschroder said...

Some possible triggers to help you:

Why wouldn't he go to smokejumping school at that age? I assume because it's a demanding-job-for-young-men kind of thing, but there are a lot of people in their 30s who embark on physically demanding things. Hell, there are people in their 50s doing marathons! Seems possible to me.

If you can't leave it at that, what did he do before that? Could it have been something that fed the possibility of smokejumping school? Like he was already in phenomenal shape?

Can the ex-wife have known him when they were younger, and pushed him before they got to the married stage?

There's got to be some simple thing you can to do fix it. Good luck!

MJFredrick said...

Thanks for all the encouragement! I ended up making Gabe a former smokejumper whose wife (now ex) wanted him to go back into smokejumping. (Natalie, you inspired that.) I sent the revisions back this AM. We'll see. Our editor IS great, Linda. This book is stronger already.

Sarah, I get it...I couldn't drool properly with the dh there, though during the naked butt scene, he leaned over and said, "Are you going to be okay?"

Natalie J. Damschroder said...


I love being inspirational! Yay, Mary! :)


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