The Results of the Pronoun Diet

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11 pages lost!

Now, onto Hot Shot revisions.


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THEN I can start Nano. Think he'll wait?

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Trish Milburn said...

Ah, a piccie of yummy Sammy. Dreamy sigh. :) Congrats on finishing the pronoun diet.

Marianne Arkins said...

LOL on the Pronoun Diet. Wish Real Dieting was so simple...

Yes, please, NaNo with me!

Jennifer Shirk said...

WOW. 11 pages? That must have been some diet. :)

Jill Monroe said...

WTG on the writing! And wow - that picture is inspiration all in itself!

Natalie J. Damschroder said...

I still don't get the pronoun diet. Especially if you cut 10 pages.

What did you do? Change stuff like:

He took off his pants.


Took off pants.


(Yes, I'm feeling quite stupid at the moment, thanks. LOL)

Kelly Boyce said...

I'm sure he'll wait. In fact, I'll keep him company til you get there. No, no,'s the least I can do.

MJFredrick said...

Just wait, y'all. I have some great Sammy pics. LOL, Kelly, on keeping him company!

Natalie, a lot of it was rewording long sentences, many of which had several phrases, like, "She knew she had to tell him," and I just made it "She had to tell him." That kind of thing.

What I did was, I highlighted all the pronouns in the ms, then all the to be verbs. I saw a LOT of repeated information that way, and had to reword and delete several sentences. It's definitely tighter and in deeper POV now.

Natalie J. Damschroder said...

Ah, I get it now! Makes perfect sense. :) Thank you!

KATZ said...

yum, like this pic of George better than the one above -- looking clean cut. ;)


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